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Hi, writing a short novel and just finished the preface. I wanted to know what you think, its only the first draft so it's not very good, but hopefully i can improve it. Constructive criticism welcome!!! Thank you and here you go:

Stacy began to run faster and harder than ever before, because this times her life was on the line. The forest grew thicker the further she ran, until the sky was barely visible, but the moon still shone down at her in the distance, like a light at the end of a tunnel. Branches clawed at her face and arms, pulling her back, the muddy floor made running difficult, though she carried on. It was as if the forest was against her, making escapeing even harder. She knew that it wasn’t far behind her, but she dared not look back, the thought of facing that thing again sent shivers down her spine. Still running, Stacy began to slow down as exhaustion caught up with, the deafening drum of her heart increased with every step. Something rustled in the tree tops above her, there was no time for her to look up, no time for her eyes to widen in disbelief, or to let out one last gasping breath. In a second she had been thrown to the ground, and had slipped into eternal darkness.
 befferz posted over a year ago
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-carola-fan- said:
I read what you wrote, adn I think it was really good. The description was great and it was a brilliant beginning of the story. Makes me want to read more. You should continiue writing!
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Thank you, I will =D
befferz posted over a year ago
roseteaxx said:
Whoa, that is amazing!
Please tell me whenever you get this published, what it's called, because I am hooked!
I'm trying to think of constructive criticism (because it's always good to get) but I honestly can't think of anything.
This is amazing! :D
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I hope I get it published, I havent thought of a name yet though, but thank you for your comments =D
befferz posted over a year ago
carsfan said:
WOW! Im wonderring what will happened next! im hooked! plz continue! its really good! great work! =D
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I'll try to get some more done, thanks =)
befferz posted over a year ago
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your welcome! ^^
carsfan posted over a year ago
smartone123 said:
i love it!it has great description and it gives you a feeling of dread.keep up your work
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Thank you =D
befferz posted over a year ago
Hopeful-girl said:
I read what you wrote and I love it . What I liked the most is your way to begin the story .Medias Res is always effective in creating suspense . I just advise you to choose a good title to support that suspense as well as focus on the development of stacy's psyche or inner mind .This makes the reader more involved in the events...
Best of luck
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I haven't thought of a title yet, but thank you so much for your comments =)
befferz posted over a year ago
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